What's wrong with my recipe for Ultimate June Bug?

Your ingredients, proportions and senses are all 100% correct. It is an unbearably sweet drink, like fruit-flavored cough syrup. That's the "draw" of the drink. Ugggh. I'd lose either the s&s or the pineapple juice - probably the s&s - and sub a few ounces of club soda, just to make it drinkable. Shame to waste all that booze.